Well this is pretty much it for my Senior Portfolio. I have to say, I still can't believe this is all over. I know it's more like the closing of a chapter in my life and the start of a new part of my life, but the transition just feels so weird.
Rather then feel sad, I think that I'm pretty happy. I mean, I feel more sad then anything but I'm excited. Excited, sad to leave, but excited, and kind of worried about how the future will turn out for me.
Indecisive I can defiantly say I am right now haha.
Anyways, it was fun. I'll never forget my AP Literature class of all girls. It was an experience and it was really fun.
(under the explanation of my reviosns, is the actually newly improved paper.)
Explanation of my Revisions:
Last year when I wrote my first real, hardcore, research paper, it didn’t go so well and so I wanted to redeem myself. I was actually looking forward to this year’s research paper because I wanted to prove to myself that I could handle it. I wanted to own that paper.
I decided to revise my artist research paper because I really wanted to make my paper even better then I thought it turned out. The paper took forever to write but I figured that I should put all my effort into the paper, especially since I was going to spend so much time on it.
What I did to edit my research paper was rearrange sentences and paragraphs, and take unnecessary parts away. What I noticed about my paper is that, I have all the pieces to make a really well written essay, I just need to get the parts in the right order. For example, I ended up taking paragraphs that were in the middle of my essay and moving to the beginning after the first paragraph. Those paragraphs sounded like an introduction to what I talked about in the beginning of my essay anyhow so I figured, why not move them around.
Also in this essay, I had a habit of repeating myself in different sentences, in different ways. I think this happened to me because I was so stuck on trying to make this paper as long as possibly. Not only did I noticed that I repeated myself, but I noticed that I took a long time to get to my point. Rather then saying what needed to be said, I wrote long unnecessary explanations they lead to my point. So what I did was erased sentences that were saying the same things and erased parts of the long explanations that lead to my points. Erasing the long explanations seemed effective. The deduction of the explanations moves the paper along a lot faster when being read and allows the reader to stay focused on what’s being discussed which helps keep the attention of the reader.
That’s basically all that I did. I took parts out and moved paragraphs around. This did seem to shorten my paper, but I feel like due to the changes, the paper sounds significantly more sophisticated and extremely well thought out, (in my opinion of course haha) like I intended.
So this one of my dialectical journals from when we our class was reading Hamlet. Hamlet is so memorable because when we had class discussions, it was intense. Not in a bad way...it wasn't that bad. I mean, it was more entertaining then anything.
All our discussions for any book were pretty intense because in our AP Lit class, there were only twelve people. Twelve girls, and no boys. We were twelve very opinionated girls at that. So discussions were never quiet. And when it came to having discussions all month on Hamlet, there was never a boring moment in the discussion.
This journal entry has to do with Ophelia and how she is with men. I have to say, Ophelia was a big topic in our class considering most of the class hated her character. I don't know how I feel about her as a character still, I feel like she was smarter then she let on. But here, in the journal entry below, is what I thought of her before we really got into Hamlet.
This is a literary analysis that I wrote on my English Class's Blog during April Vacation. We had to write about the book Jane Eyre. I first put the entire blog entry here on this post but, it looked intimidating and long so, i decided to put it on a document and put it on scribd.
This is my research paper on Judy Pfaff. It is an artist paper and it was pretty hard to write actually. Like exactly how do you write about a painting or a picture?
Well what made it easy was that I picked a seriously cool artist, Judy Pfaff. Her work was so cool and so much fun to look at. So in the end, this hard paper became pretty fun to write...even though it literally took me all night haha.
Writing our college essays was actually one of the first assignments our class had this senior year. I wrote a college essay before we were assigned to do it for class but I ended up writing this new one.
I wanted my college essay to be a reflection of myself, which I think a college essay is suppose to show. When I wrote my essay I was aiming for funny even though the topic was really serious.
As part of our senior portfolios we had to include a memoir or personal writing so this is what I'm showing as a part of my writing.
So here's my college essay. For the colleges that accepted me, I think they got a good sense of who I am through my essay.
But my favorite creative writing had to be this poem I wrote where we had to mimic the writing style of the poets that we did reserch papers on. It was fun I really liked the way it came out.
